An Overedit I've done WARNING

WARNING FOR EPILEPSY SEIZURE
Hi I've made an overedit and I would like you guys criticizm, cause I want to improve but if your not a huge fan of overedits this edit wont suit you at all :)
I'm underrated imo and will have more edits upcoming :)
Please tell me what I did wrong, and what I could improve :)

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Please look where you will post, next time. :)

Too bad I don't understand german tho.

Wtf is this shit.
90% wubwubwubwubwub
100% my eyes hurt